Creepy story challenge

I love Helium, that's the website. It gives me a chance to write all sorts of different things and get feedback on them. It has certainly developed my writing to the point where I am earning some money at it.

I decided to stretch myself and enter a few of the creative challenges, and I am quite pleased with this effort. Bear in mind I have only just started story writing, but I'd love some feedback.

Short stories : Hunting

Anna shivered in the cold night air and hugged her coat closer around her body. She hated being out at this time of night. It wasn't fair that she was expected to go out at in this weather on her own. It was freezing. She thought that tonight some one else would have gone, but no one volunteered.

The rain glistened in puddles under the intermittent streetlights. They seemed further apart than usual, and she scurried between them, her stilettos echoing in the empty streets. Momentarily she thought she heard other footsteps

This might make you cry....

Rose grasped Jack's hand in her own. They had been together for sixty years now, ever since she was a fresh faced fourteen year old starting her first job at the local grocery store. She had thought him a brash young man, but somehow they had ended up together, and stayed that way.

She could see the pain killing drugs starting to take an effect. His breathing became more regular, less of a fight against the world. His face relaxed and his eyes flickered open. He glanced towards their hands and gently smiled.

Rose couldn't see .....

Feel like making love, by bad Company

Goals for May

I had a goal for May of doing a job for Elance, I did it. So should I sit back and wait for June? No, I have decided to set a goal that I will get one marketplace article accepted on Helium.

For this I know I will have to up my game as I have failed miserably in every attempt so far. In part this is because you get no feed back on whether it was style, grammar or content that let you down but I am sure that if I re-write (more than once) I will come up with some better writing, even if it isn't bought.

I'm also going to have a go at a few creative pieces. I wrote my first one for a challenge on helium last week, and honestly I think it is pretty poor in some areas so I'll have to do a leap-frog when I have thought about it a bit more. I based it on the song Hotel Califonia by The Eagles, and now I can't get the song out of my head.

I may be going over the top with this link inside the post thing now I finally found out how to do it!

Woo Hoo.... for sure

I just got paid for my first job on Elance, I worked hard and after a few false starts due to communication snafoos the buyer seemed pleased with what I had done.

I have to say that I was a touch worried when I didn't hear from him for a few days and some of what I had written was already on his website but I think that was a timing thing as I now have the money in my hot little hand, or rather my hot little Elance account.

It was the first job I had bid on so when I got it my heart was in my mouth but I did it...woo hoo... I did it. Now to bid on some more stuff and see where life takes me.
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Wooo Hoooo.......I think!

I got that writing job I went after. I am so excited and writing like a fiend to get it done.

It's been a steep learning curve to get what the buyer wants, and I hope he doesn't lose faith but I'm endeavouring to make all the changes he asks for as I go along. The only problem really is that he is in America and I'm in Oz, so we're on totally different time lines. Having said that we seem to be answering each other's queries promptly so one of us is keeping a weird schedule.

I think it's me...I work my day job then come home and launch into this, at which time he is just getting up.

It's kind of like having a baby again, no sleep, psychotic breaks, but an underlying joy in what I'm doing. I really hope it's the start of something good and if it comes off I'll post a link to the site when I'm done. You'll have to guess which bits I wrote as there's already some stuff there.